Be Careful What You Wish For #100WCGU week 154

Posted on 1st June 2015 in 100WCGU

Attempting to distract herself she felt the wall for the 62 scratches she’d made to mark off  her best estimate of the days. She’d set her clock by the arrival of her daily meal – with no real idea of whether it came regularly.

Her clothes were baggy now, all those times she’d wished to be thin, this wasn’t quite what she’d had in mind.

Counting helped but didn’t block out the pain as he applied ever more pressure to her throat. He seemed disappointed that she didn’t struggle but her fight was all gone. Please, she thought, please let me sleep.

 

This gruesome little post is my entry into week 154 of the 100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups – click on the image to see the other entries or to enter for yourself. 

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7 Comments

  • Reply jfb57 2nd June 2015 at 9:49 am

    Very gruesome but with such pathos I feel. Thank you so much for joining 100wcgu again. Great to have you on board!

    • Reply CoffeeCurls 2nd June 2015 at 5:00 pm

      Thank you – and thanks for the prompt to let me know it was a new week. I really enjoy the 100wcgu x

  • Reply Isobel 2nd June 2015 at 11:43 pm

    Not sure how much constructive criticism you like, but I reckon you could pare down that opening para. Trust the reader to join the dots without as much detail and use the saved words to give us a bit more of the story.

    • Reply CoffeeCurls 3rd June 2015 at 5:25 pm

      Thank you – I really appreciate constructive criticism. I have to confess I saw the prompt and literally typed my post in 5 minutes as I was in a rush to go out, so I was in no doubt that there would be room for improvement. I find the 100 words very restrictive and I’m enjoying trying to convey as much as possible within them.

  • Reply Loretta 4th June 2015 at 9:43 pm

    A sad 100 words, but well written!

  • Reply Susan Mann 7th June 2015 at 11:05 pm

    It’s been so long since I’ve joined in with this. I really should try to get back. Love this, very dark and definitely what I’d read. I’d like to read more x

  • Reply mrsteepot 11th June 2015 at 10:23 am

    Wow, very powerful and dark!

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