Senses #100wcgu week164

Posted on 24th August 2015 in #writingworkshop/ 100WCGU/ Crime Fiction

Every single whisper of wind, every footstep, every breath sounded deafening to her ears; something wasn’t right and every fibre of her being knew it. Straining to see, Eva peered into the small area lit up by her torch beam, and finally saw what they’d been looking for.

A whimper from under the pile of sacking confirmed the discovery and Eva ran over to hug the small blonde girl huddled underneath. With a smile she glanced at her partner but Noah looked worried. Before she could ask him what was wrong the girl whimpered again, “Where’s my brother?” she whispered.

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Thank you for reading, I’d love it if you left a comment. This was my entry into the #100wcgu, week 164, to read more or to enter yourself please click here.

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5 Comments

  • Reply Julia Skinner 24th August 2015 at 6:31 pm

    Oooo! A mystery and you have not gone down the Ark route! Fabulous. I love how you all take these prompts in completely different directions. Love your description of Eva at the beginning. I almost held me breath in case it could be heard!

    • Reply admin 24th August 2015 at 6:34 pm

      You know me, I hate to take the obvious route!

  • Reply lorrainefort 25th August 2015 at 11:29 pm

    Lovely! I really like a good twist. This makes one think of so many possibilities. :)

  • Reply GG 26th August 2015 at 1:23 pm

    Oh my! Right in the gut. I love how you built this up and tore it back down all in 100 words. Fantastic!

  • Reply Notjustamum 1st September 2015 at 3:27 pm

    Well done! you’re so creative with words- maybe you can put all these into a little book eventually…

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